Kim with Mud!!!
We approached the puddle. The loud roaring from the four wheelers had stopped because Kim, my loving stepmom, had shut off her machine to speak to dad and me. I sat behind my dad, hugging him to stay on! But it is hard to hang on when he stands up! Especially when we go up a hill! Bugs, my four-wheeler, had to stay at home because of his flat tire. You could now hear the birds singing their favorite song and the wind whistling through the lovely mountains of Idaho. I have never been here before! And I never knew that Idaho was just across the road!
“Can I do it? Please!” Kim whispered, staring at the enormous mud puddle. Her short and soft pigtails and bright blue four-wheeler seemed to scream, “Not the mud puddle! No!” She obviously ignored their opinions.
I couldn’t believe she wanted to do that! I can remember how shiny and beautiful the four-wheelers were when we got them! All that was now going to change!
Dad nodded his head and said, “That’s my girl” He snatched Sammy, my one year old sister, off the back of Kim’s machine and said, “Go for it!”
Kim thrust on the gas. I was waiting to see her get dirty! Excitement slithered through the trees! A smile emerged from my mind onto my face! Suspense built as she got closer and closer to the mud!
Twigs cracked and rocks shuffled as she crawled over them, the tires were slowly turning. She was excited. I could tell by the way she was standing up and the way she would look back at us, her knees locked and her smile big. When I looked into her eyes, I could read her excited, anxious thoughts.
“Woo Hoo!” she screamed as she hit the puddle like a punching bag!
“Go Kim!” I yelled from dad’s four-wheeler.
“You can do it, honey!” dad yelled. He smiled at me and asked, “Are you having a great time or what?”
“No!” I said sarcastically, ”Of course I am, Dad!”
Kim had disappeared in the trees. Her laugh echoed throughout the landscape! When she stormed out of the trees, her face was brown and drippy. Surprisingly, the chocolate covered blueberry headed for the puddle once again! Little dimples appeared, and fourteen teeth glistened!
The puddle caught Kim like she was falling off a thousand foot cliff. It seemed as if it cared for her, loved her. Millions of Aspens surrounded us like we were in a stadium in the wild and they were enjoying the show as well.
She smashed into the puddle and mud splashed all over her once again! Droplets of the chocolaty brown liquid flew everywhere like little airplanes. The Aspens were no longer green and you could no longer see Kim’s eyes through her goggles! The dust from the dirt trail was still soaring in the bright, blue sky.
Mud smothered her four-wheeler. She gradually drove back to us and screamed “That…was…sooooo much…FUN!!!!” Never had I seen her so dirty and joyful at the same time!!! Now, it was my turn to ride through the wonderful pool of… MUD!!!
By~ Taylor Seghetti
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1.I cant believe there was that much mud in the puddle and on kim
ReplyDelete2.I liked how you kept on including the trees and how they looked as if they were watching
3.You had good discription on discribing the mud and I liked how you used similies like the mude was flying like little airplanes.
Ruben
I liked how you explained how there was so much mud there was at the lovely mountains of Idaho and how you were suprized on how much mud was on Kim.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said 'The dust from the dirt trail was still soaring in the bright, blue sky."
I think you had great discription when you said "Eximent was coming out of the trees." And how you thought they were saying that.
Sandra Tzompa Sosa
1. I really liked the way you describe Kim going into the mud and that you couldn't see her eyes
ReplyDelete2.I liked when you had to be behind your dad when your mom was going to talk to your dad.
3. I really liked the description of your karectoris .
jose
1. I liked how you said her eyes glistened and how clear the blue sky was, and all of your descriptions.
ReplyDelete2. I also liked how you said "The dust from the dirt trail was still soaring in the bright, blue sky.
3. I liked how you described how excited she was.
-Braxton M.
1) I liked your description of where you were when you went four wheeling in idaho with your dad and Kim.
ReplyDelete2) I also liked how you said her eyes glistened like the blue sky.
3) I loved how you wrote your story. I also liked how you described how excited she was. Elyssa Fuller