Tuesday, December 2, 2008

Cassie - "My First Luau"

My first Luau!

Ring, Ding, Dong! The extraordinary bell rang through my small little ears, announcing my freedom. “You’re dismissed you little rascals,” muttered the exhausted preschool teacher. In my excitement, I grabbed my reading books but desperately dropped them. This wasn’t just a regular Monday night there was something different to do tonight. This was going to be the best night of my life! I couldn’t wait to be out of the school building. Like a pronghorn, I dashed down the hall pretending I was being chased. Suddenly, a door that was as big as a dinosaur blocked my escape. I pushed the door to open it, but it didn’t move. I tried again; it still wouldn’t open. I tried one more time.
“Arggg!” I grumbled. At last, the big door finally opened. I felt like the strongest four-year-old in town.
Finally free of the Riverton Wyoming preschool building, I stomped my feet on the grass. I slammed the door shut and sniffed the air. It was good to be out of school. Excited, I ran like a tiger souring through the willows chasing my prey. Minutes later, I looked back to find my older brother Chandler. He thought he ruled the school and so he thinks he can do whatever he wants in and out of the school. He was just coming out of the scary huge door. He irritated me because I had told him to be on time. He never leaves school on time; so I stammered and yelled, “Hurry! Hurry up!”
Chandler angrily yelled back, “I’m coming! Don’t rush me!”
As he caught up to me, I whispered, “Shhh.” I wanted to hear the music that the DJ was playing. Jamie’s my best friend and her party was about to begin.
He looked terribly puzzled when I told him to be quite. We were getting closer to the party I just know it. “ BOOM, snap, flash, cazam” we got there at last.
We stopped, looked around. The decorations were amazing. “Wow!” I said, bewildered. I felt like I was in Hawaiian heaven, which would be a cool type of heaven. What I saw was a big stage, little grass houses that we could eat and sit in, sand, and so I saw many amazing prizes we could win after the spectacular games. This I knew was going to be the best day ever. After a drink or two of apple juice, we looked to the side and saw other people coming through the fence.
The cool Hawaiian DJ was from Hawaii but came to do this for Jamie because he’s the uncle. He got on stage and said “Lets get started, to get going we need a nice young lady to come up here and do something for us.”
Suddenly my courageous brother shoved me into the bright spotlight, it burned my eyes. As I heard him say, “go on you can do it.”
I felt frightened because I didn’t know what I was going to do, until the DJ gave me a grass skirt and a pink flower for my hair. I put the clothing on and stood on stage. He went to his Cd case and stuck a CD in. It started, and he yelled, “Dance girl dance.”
The song he was playing was from the album Margarita Ville. I had to do what I had to do. So I started to dance and felt so weird when I was Hula dancing. So I got used to dancing like that and felt better. The music had to stop sometime and so I stopped that’s when I had a flashback, It was hot in the afternoon at the California beach and I was dancing with my dad, When I was a little girl and I didn’t know what I was doing and that’s how I knew I could dance. So I flickered and snapped out of it and walked off stage. Many people went after me to dance. Then the DJ said
“We have a winner” ever body really wanted to know who it was going to be, “and that winner is, Cassandra Campbell.”
I got so happy and carried off on to the stage. When I got up there, there was a giant stuffed animal as a panda bear. No one told me there was a prize and it was a contest.
I paused “is that for me” the entire crowd nodded their head yes. I sprang up to my prize and took it like a robber. When I was walking down the stairs I looked at the time “wow” it was 9:00pm and the party started at 5:00pm, and then my brother and me saw my mom waiting in the car. I howled goodbye and left with a big smile and a happy sunshiny face.
~Cassandra

7 comments:

  1. I love your beginning of you story!
    Ha ha! Your happy little sunshine face! That is cute in you story!
    Great story I love it!


    ~ from Stefani C.

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  2. Wow! At the beggining I could see you leaving school because you had really good description.

    I could feel how excited you were.

    When you said "cazam", I saw a poof fly up with cazam written in it. It was cool.

    Caitlin

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  3. For a four year old you remembered alot of stuff. It sounded like a fun party and you won a neat prize.


    I wish I could have been there to see your dance.

    This must have been a very special day for you to write about it.

    ~Matt Schmillen~

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  4. You had AMAZING desciption! i could really see you at you pushing the door and feeling like the strongest pre schooler!!! You also had great vocabulary, and i could really see how you were feeling on stage and your excitment for the bear!! great job -River Heide

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  5. You had amazing vocabulary like spectacular.

    You had really nice description.

    That story was great with making me imagine everything.

    Kameron moroneso

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  6. 1.Wow! I really loved your dialog thats how you make your story so good.
    2.you have amazing vocabulary.
    3.hey i love your story i was amazed when i read it you must really put some thinking into the story!
    Juan Morillon.

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  7. You did a really good job on similies in your story.

    Nice description and dialog.

    I liked it when you said "I spang up to take my prize like a robber.

    Kameron Moroneso

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