COBRA
Fuller Ross
Just looking at those magnificent scales, grey and vanilla belly, coal colored back with khaki camouflaging, and the arched neck, I knew I was staring at a spitting cobra. Even in my shaken state, I knew his venom could blind me for life…if not kill me. I was on my knees staring into the cobra’s eyes. Fear told me to run for safety, but hoping for death, the diabolical stare of the cobra ordered me to stay. The cobra was like the candy shop coaxing me to stay, swaying slowly back and forth. My response was what he most wanted.
Then it came back to me. My dad had warned, “Now that we are in Africa, never looks a cobra in the eye…or any snake for that matter. As a kid, your mother lost most of her dogs to snakes. These aren’t garter snakes anymore, OK.”
“Yeah, yeah. OK,” I mumbled, thinking it would never happen.
Now, I was doing the opposite of what my dad had instructed. I was looking the wicked stare directly in the eye. I realized that I was helpless.
Suddenly a stick landed in front of me, breaking the trance. Rocks begin pummeling down. They continue to land between the snake and me, but never hitting the snake. While I am distracted by the falling debris, the snake holds its stare. He was focused on me…on my death.
I felt the swoop of arms suddenly grab me. I’m jerked into the air, carried away from the scene. I am confused and in shock by what has just happened.
A few minutes later the man who was throwing sticks and stones came in and confronted us and said. “The snake is gone.”
The people there had herd about it and cheered until one man said. “Where is it now.”
The man answered in a chuckle, “Not on this earth that’s for sure.”
Suddenly I recover and this one man keeps on checking my eyes. Normaly I would yell I am fine. But I realize it’s for my own good.
After all the chaos had ended my mom told me. “The man who saved you was blind from a Cobra and you should thank him he didn’t have to do it.”
Later that night I wondered was he ever scared of snakes and if so today had he faced his fear? And maybe, had I faced mine?
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1. I think you had a really good conclusion that made a reader think, like a cliffhanger.
ReplyDelete2.I liked the beggining, it was a very intense place to start and you described the consequences very well.
3. This story had some really, really good feelings, thoughts, and I loved how you described the cobra
adam
1.I liked how you said it was coaxing you to stay like a candy shop.
ReplyDelete2.i liked how you started your story it began were all the exciting things happen.
3.You had good discription like when you said what shade of camoflauge the snake had
Ruben
1. It was good how at the beginning of the story you said all the details about the snake. It helped me imagine what it looked like better
ReplyDelete2. When I read that rocks came pummeling down it left me in suspense. I didn't know why rocks were pummeling down.
3. You had good dialog in you story.
Dylan
1. I liked the supention you made.
ReplyDelete2. I like how you ended your story saying how you both may haved faced your fears.
3. I like the disctription you used.
Julio V.
1. I like how you ended with a question, giving us questions of our own.
ReplyDelete2. I liked how the man threw rocks and sticks but the cobra nevr broke it's stare. It was well described.
3. The is was actually one of the more suspeseful stories on the entire blog.
Clay
1.i realy like your word choice
ReplyDelete2.i enjoy your personification
3.i like it how you make like how you could tell what the cobra was saying looking in its eyes
4.i enjoy your your suspense
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